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On Saturday the twenty-first of January, Elliot took a gun, pressed it to the strip of bone between his eyes, and shot himself. The bullet shattered the frontal bone of his skull, warping his features past recognition, and burrowed through his pre-frontal cortex into the midbrain. He died before the sound stopped echoing through his empty apartment.
This story isn't about that.
I worked with Elliot for only a little while—less than six months. Most of what I knew about him came from his desk. Unlike the smaller ones the secretaries and other reporters had, it was a stately, imposing thing. It would've been terrifying, especially to a mousy little girl like me, but it was covered in paperweights and spare pens and pictures of people hunting ducks. Anyway, Elliot himself denied fear: he was middle-aged, poised on the cusp between forty and fifty. His hair had already turned grey, but he didn't dye it, like he hadn't noticed he was getting older or just didn't care. He smiled more than anyone I knew.
When we first started working together, I didn't respect him. He was the editor at the local paper. I took an internship there for a semester in my junior year of high school. For my first project, I wrote a short column describing myself. It impressed him. "Your grammar is perfect," he commented, tapping the page with his red pen. "You're really a very talented writer."
I wanted to be professional about the whole thing, but I bristled. He spoke like I was a dog who could do a fancy trick, like because I wasn't yet eighteen I wasn't human. He didn't mean it that way, but that's how it sounded. My hands fisting and unfisting in my lap, I smiled politely and nodded. "Thanks. I worked really hard on it." When I left the room, I scowled. He was a man of an older age, a relic of a time when women were pretty pets, not professionals. I was a kid, yeah, but that was no excuse.
Over time, though, he grew on me. I think that he realized I wasn't like any of the other high school students he worked with: most of them had been looking for photography experience, but I hated that part. I wanted to write. Once he got that, we got along. "You qualify too much," he told me once, circling a very and crossing it out. "It's the only thing that always comes up when I read your work." I nodded, but I didn't get it, and he could tell. He rubbed his chin; even across the desk, I could hear the rasp of stubble. "Look." He spread his hands. "Be brave. Just let the facts speak for themselves. Nine times out of ten, we'll understand you just fine without the extra description."
I wrinkled my nose. "What about the tenth time?"
Elliot laughed and slid my paper across the desk to me. "That's what I'm for." He got to his feet, and so did I. Like always, he stuck his hand out to me, and we shook. He had a firm grip and strong, rough hands. "See you next week."
The next time I came into work, the secretary stopped me before I could get to his office. "Didn't you hear?" she whispered. "He shot himself." She looked at me, and then, hesitantly, she touched my shoulder. "You can go home, dear." I looked down at the paper in my hands—my last column. There was a very in the first sentence; I took a red pen from the jar and crossed it out. Good advice is good advice, even if the giver is... was a hypocrite.
Once outside, I wondered why I had never noticed there were no pictures of his family on that desk.
This story isn't about that.
I worked with Elliot for only a little while—less than six months. Most of what I knew about him came from his desk. Unlike the smaller ones the secretaries and other reporters had, it was a stately, imposing thing. It would've been terrifying, especially to a mousy little girl like me, but it was covered in paperweights and spare pens and pictures of people hunting ducks. Anyway, Elliot himself denied fear: he was middle-aged, poised on the cusp between forty and fifty. His hair had already turned grey, but he didn't dye it, like he hadn't noticed he was getting older or just didn't care. He smiled more than anyone I knew.
When we first started working together, I didn't respect him. He was the editor at the local paper. I took an internship there for a semester in my junior year of high school. For my first project, I wrote a short column describing myself. It impressed him. "Your grammar is perfect," he commented, tapping the page with his red pen. "You're really a very talented writer."
I wanted to be professional about the whole thing, but I bristled. He spoke like I was a dog who could do a fancy trick, like because I wasn't yet eighteen I wasn't human. He didn't mean it that way, but that's how it sounded. My hands fisting and unfisting in my lap, I smiled politely and nodded. "Thanks. I worked really hard on it." When I left the room, I scowled. He was a man of an older age, a relic of a time when women were pretty pets, not professionals. I was a kid, yeah, but that was no excuse.
Over time, though, he grew on me. I think that he realized I wasn't like any of the other high school students he worked with: most of them had been looking for photography experience, but I hated that part. I wanted to write. Once he got that, we got along. "You qualify too much," he told me once, circling a very and crossing it out. "It's the only thing that always comes up when I read your work." I nodded, but I didn't get it, and he could tell. He rubbed his chin; even across the desk, I could hear the rasp of stubble. "Look." He spread his hands. "Be brave. Just let the facts speak for themselves. Nine times out of ten, we'll understand you just fine without the extra description."
I wrinkled my nose. "What about the tenth time?"
Elliot laughed and slid my paper across the desk to me. "That's what I'm for." He got to his feet, and so did I. Like always, he stuck his hand out to me, and we shook. He had a firm grip and strong, rough hands. "See you next week."
The next time I came into work, the secretary stopped me before I could get to his office. "Didn't you hear?" she whispered. "He shot himself." She looked at me, and then, hesitantly, she touched my shoulder. "You can go home, dear." I looked down at the paper in my hands—my last column. There was a very in the first sentence; I took a red pen from the jar and crossed it out. Good advice is good advice, even if the giver is... was a hypocrite.
Once outside, I wondered why I had never noticed there were no pictures of his family on that desk.
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anemic, broken, and growing up anyway
when my sister was five, she dictated a letter to me in her strong little voice
while dust drifted in the sunshine
of our creaky old room.
dear me [she said],
barney is the best. i will wear blue all the time even though i'm a girl. my heart beats without me telling it to and that's pretty cool. i think people always feel better if you tell them you love them. i will always smile because i have dimples when i smile.
love,
me.
"did you write it?" she asked, and i told her i did, every word
with the chunky yellow pencil i'd fished out of my school bag.
i handed her the letter, and she folded it up carefully
and she smiled.
when my s
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Snowstorm
The children misheard you.
They broke open the jar
looking for petals
and found only flours.
The dust is everywhere,
settling everywhere,
on the refrigerator and the stove,
on the startled mother cat
yowling her pawprints
through the snowy floor,
on her sharp-eared kittens
prancing in the clouds.
The three-year old is screaming.
He has cut his finger on the glass,
there are red streaks in the snow,
and his white-faced brother
stares up at you with a look
commonly reserved for
the confused and the betrayed.
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Runner's Death
December twenty-fifth.
Christmas time.
In other words, the time of the year my parents put their everything's-alright smiles on and Anabelle fills the toilet with puke so that she can pretend to be filling her stomach with food when all our relatives come over--the time of the year we all pretend to be normal.
It's also the anniversary of Runner's death. But, like they always do, my family has covered the events of December twenty-fifth, one year ago, the same way they did the cracks in our living room wall--in a layer of brig
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I'm not sure about this piece. It's a true story, although I changed the names and the exact nature of the events enough to make it fictional. I don't know if the fictional 'me' is enough of a character, though.
At least I finally got the ending right. I *think* it's not too obvious.
I wrote this for a class that sort of killed my ability to write for a little while, so I guess it would make sense I have mixed feelings about it. Critique would be greatly appreciated.
At least I finally got the ending right. I *think* it's not too obvious.
I wrote this for a class that sort of killed my ability to write for a little while, so I guess it would make sense I have mixed feelings about it. Critique would be greatly appreciated.
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This is good work. Great hook and then the rest is crisp and clean.