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They say New York is beautiful this time of year.
They tell me the snow makes everything sparkle:
It covers dirty streets
and graffiti
and homeless men that nobody took inside.
Everything is smeared with white,
its truth gone,
like a chalkboard after lecture ends.
I ask what it looks like in spring,
When the buildings stand raw and unprotected
And the trees stretch barren, skeletal fingers to a sun that doesn't yet nourish.
They tell me to think less morbid thoughts.
It was snowing the night you died.
Did the flakes fall on your face?
Did you catch them on your tongue?
Or did you just put your hands in your pockets
And hunch your shoulders against the wind
And never once think that you were a target,
That your life was numbered in seconds, not decades or years or even days…
That every step took you farther away from the life you knew.
And I think of your body, broken and still.
And I think of what is left of myself.
And I think…
I think the best part of me lies bleeding in the snow
I think the best part of me disappeared under the feet of a thousand passersby
I think the best part of me is lost—
Because it was your hopes
Your dreams
Your life.
And now all I have is this barren landscape
Where the buildings stand proud and empty
And the branches block out the sky.
I do not wish for snow.
They tell me the snow makes everything sparkle:
It covers dirty streets
and graffiti
and homeless men that nobody took inside.
Everything is smeared with white,
its truth gone,
like a chalkboard after lecture ends.
I ask what it looks like in spring,
When the buildings stand raw and unprotected
And the trees stretch barren, skeletal fingers to a sun that doesn't yet nourish.
They tell me to think less morbid thoughts.
It was snowing the night you died.
Did the flakes fall on your face?
Did you catch them on your tongue?
Or did you just put your hands in your pockets
And hunch your shoulders against the wind
And never once think that you were a target,
That your life was numbered in seconds, not decades or years or even days…
That every step took you farther away from the life you knew.
And I think of your body, broken and still.
And I think of what is left of myself.
And I think…
I think the best part of me lies bleeding in the snow
I think the best part of me disappeared under the feet of a thousand passersby
I think the best part of me is lost—
Because it was your hopes
Your dreams
Your life.
And now all I have is this barren landscape
Where the buildings stand proud and empty
And the branches block out the sky.
I do not wish for snow.
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My Answer
My Answer
Kirara was walking the familiar path to the hill where four graves were. The four graves belonged to the four samurai who gave up their lives so they could live without fear. But, that was ten years ago. She hadn't seen Katsushiro or Kambei in ten years. She had gone back to see Yukino and Shichiroji, but they hadn't seen them either. When she reached the top, she saw some kids playing.
"I wonder what these graves are here for," one kid said.
"Oh look! It's Kirara-sama! Maybe she could tell us what these graves are here for!"
All the kids ran up to Kirara and gathered around her.
"Kirara-sama, please tell us what these are here
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Suki -- Love
It was supposed to be an easy conversation.
Oyaji was going to tell his daughter about the duty she had to her people, and that she needed to put aside her own selfish urges and make the betterment of Kyoshi Island her first priority. She would understand -- Suki had always been mild and dutiful when the need arose, and she had such a level head. She would see that he had her best interests at heart, and she would listen calmly to what he had to say. That was what always happened, and thus it was what he always expected.
He did not expect Suki's eyes to go wide and furious, or her hands to clench into tight fists on her dresser. "What?"
"I
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I have this character. I've known for a while now that he writes poetry, and that most of his poetry would be about his brother's death (his brother was killed in a gang shooting in New York). Since I mistrust poetry, I figured he was probably a crappy poet. Then I decided to see for myself.
Yeah, strange origin story, I know.
So... I like the imagery in the first few stanzas, but I'm not sure about the emotion in the second-to-last. Is it sharp enough?
Yeah, strange origin story, I know.
So... I like the imagery in the first few stanzas, but I'm not sure about the emotion in the second-to-last. Is it sharp enough?
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I think this has some enormous potential! The last line is beautifully poignant and ties everything back up together. If at all possible, I would suggest maybe getting some structure and/or a rhyme scheme in there. I just find that have some sort of structure within the poem helps to punctuate the emotion that you want.
But the poem is still fine on its own. That last line....wonderful!
But the poem is still fine on its own. That last line....wonderful!